Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents a clear narrative but contains several grammatical and punctuation errors that affect clarity. Paying attention to verb tenses and proper punctuation will enhance your writing significantly.
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Yesterday I went to the store and I seen my friend who was buying apples oranges and bread he didnt have enough money, so he ask me if I could loan him five dollars I said sure why not but then the cashier she says thats not allowed you cant pay for someone else groceries which didnt make sense to me because people do it all the time
Issues Summary
"I seen my friend"
→ Suggestion: I saw my friend
The correct past tense of 'see' is 'saw,' not 'seen.' Remember to use the proper form of the verb based on the tense.
"he didnt have enough money"
→ Suggestion: he didn't have enough money
A contraction requires an apostrophe to indicate the omission of letters. In this case, 'didn't' is the correct form.
"he ask me"
→ Suggestion: he asked me
The verb 'ask' should be in the past tense 'asked' to match the rest of the narrative.
"cashier she says"
→ Suggestion: the cashier says
The phrase is awkwardly structured; using 'the cashier' instead of 'cashier she' clarifies the subject and improves readability.
"thats not allowed"
→ Suggestion: that's not allowed
Similar to 'didnt,' the contraction 'that's' requires an apostrophe to indicate the omission of letters.
"you cant pay for someone else groceries"
→ Suggestion: you can't pay for someone else's groceries
The contraction 'can't' needs an apostrophe, and 'someone else's' shows possession correctly.
"which didnt make sense to me"
→ Suggestion: which didn't make sense to me
Again, the contraction 'didn't' requires an apostrophe to be grammatically correct.
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