Teacher's Summary
You've created an engaging scene with Janner and Tink, and your ideas are clear. With a few adjustments to grammar and punctuation, your writing will be even stronger!
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Janner and Tink were working hard lifting crates. the last box had books in it. oscar put that one their to look at it later. when they looked at they saw all kinds of books Janner found a pirate book which made him think of his grandfather.
Issues Summary
"the last box had books in it."
→ Suggestion: The last box had books in it.
The sentence should start with a capital letter to indicate the beginning of a new sentence.
"oscar put that one their to look at it later."
→ Suggestion: Oscar put that one there to look at it later.
The word 'their' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'there' to indicate a location.
"when they looked at they saw all kinds of books"
→ Suggestion: when they looked at it, they saw all kinds of books
The sentence is missing the pronoun 'it' after 'looked at,' and a comma is needed before 'they' to separate the clauses.
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