Teacher's Summary
You've created an intriguing narrative with interesting characters and a mysterious map! With a few adjustments to grammar, punctuation, and spelling, your writing will be even clearer and more engaging.
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The boys looked at the map. Then Janner saw that it was a map of Glippwood by Reteep who said who ever reads it gets their fingers cut off. Just then he came in Tink put it in his sleeve and didn't get his fingers cut off. On their way back the black carage drove by.
Issues Summary
"who ever"
→ Suggestion: whoever
The term 'who ever' should be combined into one word, 'whoever,' as it functions as a single pronoun in this context.
"carage"
→ Suggestion: carriage
The word 'carage' is a misspelling; the correct spelling is 'carriage,' which refers to a vehicle.
"Then Janner saw that it was a map of Glippwood by Reteep who said who ever reads it gets their fingers cut off."
→ Suggestion: Then Janner saw that it was a map of Glippwood by Reteep, who said whoever reads it gets their fingers cut off.
A comma is needed before 'who said' to separate the clauses and clarify the sentence structure.
"Just then he came in Tink put it in his sleeve"
→ Suggestion: Just then he came in; Tink put it in his sleeve.
A semicolon is needed to separate the two independent clauses for better clarity.
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