Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents an intriguing scene with vivid imagery. With a few adjustments to grammar and syntax, the clarity and flow of the narrative can be greatly improved.
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Janner's head felt like it was asleep for days. Tink hurling a stone missed the hound. Janner shook away the dizziness to help his brother throe stones at the hounds. When a stone hit a hound it became a contest to see who would hit the last hound.
Issues Summary
"throe stones"
→ Suggestion: throw stones
The word 'throe' is incorrectly used here; the correct word is 'throw,' which means to propel something with force.
"Tink hurling a stone missed the hound."
→ Suggestion: Tink, hurling a stone, missed the hound.
The sentence structure is awkward; adding commas helps clarify that 'hurling a stone' is a descriptive phrase about Tink.
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