Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents a thoughtful narrative with interesting reflections. With some attention to grammar and clarity, your ideas can shine even more brightly. Keep up the good work!
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The author told his students to imagine if they only had one day to live, and they had to be good students. The author told them to pretend that for a week and keep a diary. The author said that the diaries mostly were about how much the students appreciated and loved their parents.
The author said he was staying at a hotel and when he was checking in, the guy there was offering to help him with anything. Later he say a window washer in the hotel and an old lady needed help getting in. The window washer stopped what he was doing and went and helped her. The author asked the manager what he did to make everyone the way they were. The manager said that he had all of them add what they wanted to the mission statement.
The author said that the right side of the bran is the logical and verbal side and its the side that puts things together. The left side is the creative side that breaks things apart.
Issues Summary
"he say a window washer"
→ Suggestion: he saw a window washer
The verb 'say' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'saw' to indicate a past action.
"its the side that puts things together"
→ Suggestion: it's the side that puts things together
The contraction 'it's' (it is) should be used instead of 'its' (possessive form) to convey the intended meaning.
"the way they were"
→ Suggestion: the way they acted
The phrase 'the way they were' is vague; specifying 'the way they acted' clarifies the meaning.
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