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This writing sample presents some interesting ideas about effective management and planning. With a few grammatical and punctuation adjustments, your clarity and professionalism will improve significantly. Keep up the good work!

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The author said that writing a weekly planner instead of a daily one is better. He is saying that looking ahead and having your plans in mind is better than learning them right then. This way you can see all of your goals in one spot and be able to organize them better than one planning for one day.
The author says that effective managers put first things first and leaders figure out what things to put first. First generation managers are not very effective, 2nd generation managers try to get credit for showing up, and 3rd generation managers are effective and get things done.
The author says that habit one (be proactive) is your programmer, habit two (begin with the end in mind) writes the program, and habit three (put first things first) runs or lives the program
I finished chapter two which is begin with the end in mind. That means to think about what people, family, and friends will say about you and you life.

Issues Summary

Grammar "your plans in mind is better than learning them right then"

→ Suggestion: your plans in mind are better than learning them right then

The subject 'your plans' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

Syntax "be able to organize them better than one planning for one day"

→ Suggestion: be able to organize them better than by planning for just one day

The phrase 'one planning for one day' is awkward; rephrasing it clarifies the comparison.

Punctuation "3rd generation managers are effective and get things done"

→ Suggestion: 3rd generation managers are effective, and get things done

A comma before 'and' is needed to separate two independent clauses for clarity.

Punctuation "I finished chapter two which is begin with the end in mind"

→ Suggestion: I finished chapter two, which is 'Begin with the End in Mind'

A comma is needed before 'which' to properly introduce the non-restrictive clause, and the chapter title should be in quotes for clarity.

Spelling "you life"

→ Suggestion: your life

The word 'you' should be 'your' to correctly refer to possession.

Error Breakdown

Grammar 1
Spelling 1
Punctuation 2
Syntax 1

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The author said that writing a weekly planner instead of a daily one is better. He is saying that looking ahead and having your plans in mind are better than learning them right then. This way you can see all of your goals in one spot and be able to organize them better than by planning for one day. The author says that effective managers put first things first and leaders figure out what things to put first. First generation managers are not very effective, 2nd generation managers try to get credit for showing up, and 3rd generation managers are effective and get things done. The author says that habit one (be proactive) is your programmer, habit two (begin with the end in mind) writes the program, and habit three (put first things first) runs or lives the program I finished chapter two, which is begin with the end in mind. That means to think about what people, family, and friends will say about you and your life.
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