Teacher's Summary
Your writing presents interesting ideas about friendship and historical figures. With some attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling, your message will be even clearer and more impactful. Keep up the good work!
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Having a genuine interest in people is the next step in winning friends. He gives all kinds of historical example of how even a smile can change how someone acts or feels. This was his favorite thing about Teddy Roosevelt he always made friends with everyone. When he would call on the white house after he was president and Howard Taft was president, he still remembered all the staff's name and talked about there interests. There are all kinds of examples like this.
Issues Summary
"historical example"
→ Suggestion: historical examples
The phrase should be plural to match the context of 'all kinds of,' which indicates multiple examples.
"this was his favorite thing about Teddy Roosevelt he always made friends with everyone."
→ Suggestion: this was his favorite thing about Teddy Roosevelt: he always made friends with everyone.
A colon is needed to separate the two independent clauses for clarity.
"the white house"
→ Suggestion: the White House
Proper nouns like 'White House' should be capitalized to reflect their status as specific names.
"staff's name"
→ Suggestion: staff's names
The plural form 'names' is needed here because it refers to multiple staff members.
"there interests"
→ Suggestion: their interests
'There' is a homophone error; 'their' is the correct possessive form to indicate ownership.
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