Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents interesting ideas about relationships and interests. With some attention to grammar and spelling, your message will come across even more clearly. Keep up the good work!
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The main thing seems to be jus showing a ton of interest in people and complimenting them on things they obviously appreciate and enjoy, like hobbies. The author give numerous examples of times he was interested in other peoples hobbies and seemed to appreciate them they often gave him things trying to branch out. Because they feel sometimes like there isn't many people who have the same interests as them and they want to hook that relationship.
Issues Summary
"jus showing"
→ Suggestion: just showing
The word 'jus' is a misspelling of 'just.' Always double-check spelling to ensure clarity.
"The author give"
→ Suggestion: The author gives
The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the subject 'author.'
"other peoples hobbies"
→ Suggestion: other people's hobbies
The possessive form 'people's' is needed here to indicate that the hobbies belong to other people.
"appreciate them they often gave him things"
→ Suggestion: appreciate them; they often gave him things
A semicolon is needed to separate these two independent clauses for better clarity and flow.
"there isn't many people"
→ Suggestion: there aren't many people
The plural noun 'people' requires the plural verb form 'aren't' instead of 'isn't.'
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