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This writing sample presents interesting ideas about business management and relationships. With some attention to grammar, syntax, and spelling, your message will be even clearer and more impactful. Keep up the good work!

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The author's son said that he had been working for his father's business, and a business that they had a contract or something and the business decided they didn't want to do it anymore. It would cost the author's business seventy thousand dollars. Instead of taking it to the law, the author's son made friends with the business, and a couple of months later the business signed a contract that made the authors business 300,000 dollars.
The author was talking about how a business manager told the him that his workers didn't know how to get close to their customers. He said that they just take orders, and they don't have any sales knowledge. The manager was having the salespeople do the dirty work too. They changed that and the business became when of the top businesses.
The author said that a manager said to him that he had to rate employees, and he was telling the author that he rated him a one but he only deserved a 3. The manager said that he rated him a one because he did his job, but he is a troublemaker and he neglects people. The author suggested that the manager talk to the employee about trying to think win/win instead of win/loose. And the employee was way better after that.
This chapter was about thinking win/win instead of win/loose. Win/win is thinking in a way that is good for you and for others.

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Grammar "the authors business"

→ Suggestion: the author's business

The possessive form 'author's' needs an apostrophe to indicate ownership.

Syntax "when of the top businesses"

→ Suggestion: one of the top businesses

The phrase 'when of' is incorrect; it should be 'one of' to convey the intended meaning.

Spelling "win/loose"

→ Suggestion: win/lose

The correct spelling is 'lose,' which means to fail to win or retain something.

Spelling "win/loose."

→ Suggestion: win/lose.

This is a repetition of the previous error; ensure to use 'lose' consistently in your writing.

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Spelling 2
Syntax 1

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The author's son said that he had been working for his father's business, and a business that they had a contract or something and the business decided they didn't want to do it anymore. It would cost the author's business seventy thousand dollars. Instead of taking it to the law, the author's son made friends with the business, and a couple of months later the business signed a contract that made the author's business 300,000 dollars. The author was talking about how a business manager told the him that his workers didn't know how to get close to their customers. He said that they just take orders, and they don't have any sales knowledge. The manager was having the salespeople do the dirty work too. They changed that and the business became one of the top businesses. The author said that a manager said to him that he had to rate employees, and he was telling the author that he rated him a one but he only deserved a 3. The manager said that he rated him a one because he did his job, but he is a troublemaker and he neglects people. The author suggested that the manager talk to the employee about trying to think win/win instead of win/lose. And the employee was way better after that. This chapter was about thinking win/win instead of win/lose. Win/win is thinking in a way that is good for you and for others.
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