Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents an interesting narrative with clear themes. However, there are a few grammatical and spelling errors that need attention. With careful proofreading, the clarity and professionalism of your writing will improve significantly.
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The author gave an example. He said to suppose if you could not see well and you went to the eye doctor. The doctor hears that you can not see well and takes off his glasses and says," here try these they work for me." He said to diagnose before deciding what your going do.
The author's son said that he was dreaming of playing football in the NFL when he was playing in collage, but he tore his ACL and could not play anymore. He tried to live his dream through his son but when his son was in ninth grade he decided he did not want to play anymore. His father didn't make him, or try to convince him to play football. Then the boy changed his mind and he wanted to play football.
The author said that instead of trying to convince someone to do something, listen to them and try to find the problem with it.
Issues Summary
"can not"
→ Suggestion: cannot
The word 'cannot' should be written as one word instead of two. This is the standard form used in English.
"here try these they work for me."
→ Suggestion: here, try these; they work for me.
This sentence needs proper punctuation to separate the clauses. Adding a comma after 'here' and a semicolon before 'they' clarifies the meaning.
"your going do."
→ Suggestion: you're going to do.
'Your' is a possessive form, while 'you're' is the contraction for 'you are.' This is a common mistake, so remember to use the correct form.
"collage"
→ Suggestion: college
'Collage' refers to an art form, while 'college' is the correct term for an institution of higher education. Make sure to use the right word in context.
Error Breakdown
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