Teacher's Summary
This writing sample effectively conveys the author's message about kindness and understanding. With some attention to grammar and syntax, it can be made even clearer and more polished.
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The author says "Be sympathetic towards other peoples personal ideas and emotions." he means act kind and do what other people want you to do. He gives an example of somebody wrote him a mean letter about something he got wrong and instead of writing a mean letter back he went to her house and apologized in front of her and she just apologized back. Even though what he did did not require an apology he still got what he wanted from her.
Issues Summary
"peoples"
→ Suggestion: people's
The word 'peoples' should be 'people's' to indicate possession, as it refers to the ideas and emotions belonging to other people.
"somebody wrote him a mean letter"
→ Suggestion: somebody had written him a mean letter
Using the past perfect tense 'had written' clarifies the sequence of events and improves the flow of the sentence.
"instead of writing a mean letter back he went to her house"
→ Suggestion: instead of writing a mean letter back, he went to her house
A comma is needed before 'he' to separate the two independent clauses for better readability.
"what he did did not require an apology"
→ Suggestion: what he did did not necessarily require an apology
Adding 'necessarily' clarifies the meaning and enhances the sentence structure.
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