Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents a clear narrative and effectively conveys the author's ideas. With a few adjustments to grammar and syntax, it can become even more polished and coherent.
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The author said that a man named Miranda worked very hard for seven years to make a play. When he was finished he took a vacation, and when he was on vacation he read the book Hamilton. He then made the play Hamilton.
The author said that he and his wife and kids went somewhere for a year. The author and his family went on a trail ride very often and he and his family enjoyed the break. The author was able to get so much more done than he was getting done before. He said that he was sharpening the saw.
The author said that a woodsman once said that if he had six hours to cut down a tree he would spend four hours sharpening his axe. The author said that you should do that with you mind, physical health, and religion. You will be able to tell the difference very quickly if you did that.
The seventh and final habit is sharpening the saw. Getting better physically, mentally, and religiously at the things you do.
Issues Summary
"if you did that"
→ Suggestion: if you do that
The verb tense should be consistent; 'did' is past tense while 'you do' is present tense, which matches the context better.
"Getting better physically, mentally, and religiously at the things you do."
→ Suggestion: Getting better physically, mentally, and religiously at the things you do is important.
This sentence fragment lacks a main clause, making it incomplete. Adding a main clause will clarify the thought.
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