Teacher's Summary
Your writing presents an engaging narrative with interesting character dynamics. With a few grammatical and punctuation adjustments, it will become even clearer and more polished. Keep up the good work!
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Judah talks and talks with Balthazar the Egyptian. He would have like to go and find the Christ himself but he had no idea where to find him so he had to be satisfied with Balthazar's account. Simon is starting to regain his health. He had been unhealthy since the unspecified accident. His daughter is starting to fall in love with Judah and is trying to bring him back to their house. Judah on the other hand is in love with Balthazar's daughter whom he saved from Mathasala.
Issues Summary
"would have like to"
→ Suggestion: would have liked to
The correct form is 'would have liked to,' as 'liked' is the past participle of 'like.' This small adjustment will improve the grammatical accuracy of your sentence.
"he had no idea where to find him so he had to be satisfied"
→ Suggestion: he had no idea where to find him, so he had to be satisfied
A comma is needed before 'so' to separate the two independent clauses. This will enhance the clarity of your writing.
"Judah on the other hand is in love"
→ Suggestion: Judah, on the other hand, is in love
Commas are needed around 'on the other hand' to set off this phrase, which adds clarity and improves the flow of your sentence.
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