Teacher's Summary
Your writing presents an intriguing narrative with interesting character interactions. With a few adjustments in punctuation and grammar, your ideas will shine even more clearly!
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Judah is woken by Amrah and led to the house that he used to live in. according to her the romans don't actually own it and it's his. he moves in their taking a bunch of the stuff that Simon has gotten and leaves Simon with his house, daughter and company. Balthazar comes to Judah's house and they have a long conversation about who Jesus is.
Issues Summary
"according to her the romans don't actually own it"
→ Suggestion: According to her, the Romans don't actually own it.
This sentence needs a comma after 'her' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause, and 'Romans' should be capitalized as it is a proper noun.
"he moves in their taking a bunch of the stuff"
→ Suggestion: he moves in there, taking a bunch of the stuff
'Their' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'there' to indicate a place. Additionally, a comma is needed before 'taking' to clarify the sentence structure.
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