Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents an intriguing narrative with a clear focus on Judah's internal conflict. With some attention to punctuation and spelling, the clarity and impact of your writing can be significantly enhanced.
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Judah travels and stops at a place where a lot of people are. There is a Nazarite who is saying," behold the lamb of God who takes away the sin of the world". Judah new that the savior was there and he saw them. Judah was debating if he was a king or a savior.
Issues Summary
"saying," behold"
→ Suggestion: saying, "behold
There should be a space after the comma before the quotation mark to properly separate the dialogue from the rest of the sentence.
"the lamb of God who takes away the sin of the world"
→ Suggestion: the Lamb of God, who takes away the sin of the world,
The phrase should be capitalized as 'Lamb' since it refers to a specific title, and commas are needed to set off the non-restrictive clause for clarity.
"Judah new that the savior was there"
→ Suggestion: Judah knew that the Savior was there
The correct past tense of 'know' is 'knew,' and 'Savior' should be capitalized as it is a title.
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