Teacher's Summary
Your writing presents thoughtful ideas about success and the importance of support. With a few adjustments to grammar and punctuation, your message will be even clearer and more impactful.
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PARAGRAPH 1
If you want to accomplish something you need to have the right attitude, but at the same time you need the right map. If your trying to get around Chicago with a map of Detroit you will fail no matter your attitude.
PARAGRAPH 2
You also need people to succeed, if you don't have anybody to do things like help, support and appreciate what you do then succeeding becomes really hard. And in some cases it is your job to be there for someone else, like if you have a kid. To get the attributes needed to get people, or any attributes, takes time.
PARAGRAPH 3
It's important to understand that people could be looking at the same image and have totally different ideas about what it is because of previously viewed images.
Issues Summary
"your trying"
→ Suggestion: you're trying
The contraction 'you're' (you are) is needed here instead of 'your', which indicates possession. This small change clarifies the meaning.
"succeed, if you don't"
→ Suggestion: succeed; if you don't
A semicolon is more appropriate here than a comma, as it separates two independent clauses. This enhances the clarity of your sentence.
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