Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents interesting ideas and stories, but it contains several grammatical and spelling errors that can be easily fixed. Paying attention to these details will enhance clarity and improve the overall quality of your writing.
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The author was talking about how a boss went to his workers who were required to wear protective helmets and he would yell at them to wear them when they didn't but they didn't listen. When the boss went to them and reminded them nicely to wear their helmets they did. The author was talking about how staying calm while correcting works best.
The author tells a story about how a man was killing people at a gold mine and a woman went and talked to him and she just listened to him and let him talk about himself. The author is talking about how if you listen and let people talk about themselves they enjoy being around you more.
The author talks about how there was this story about a father who snaps at his son all the time. He realizes this and goes and an apologizes. What he is saying is instead of condemning people, try to understand them.
In the first chapter the author is talking about how when talking to people try to under stand them. He says the one if the things people want most is the felling of importance.
Issues Summary
"goes and an apologizes"
→ Suggestion: goes and apologizes
The phrase 'an apologizes' is incorrect because 'an' is an article that should not precede a verb. Simply remove 'an' to correct the sentence.
"try to under stand them"
→ Suggestion: try to understand them
The phrase 'under stand' is misspelled; it should be one word, 'understand.' This is a common mistake, so double-checking spelling can help.
"the one if the things"
→ Suggestion: the one of the things
The word 'if' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'of' to correctly convey the meaning of belonging or relating.
"felling of importance"
→ Suggestion: feeling of importance
The word 'felling' is a misspelling; the correct word is 'feeling,' which refers to an emotional state. This is an easy error to make, so it's good to proofread.
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