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This writing sample presents a clear understanding of the author's message and effectively summarizes key points. With a few grammatical adjustments, the clarity and professionalism of the writing will be enhanced.
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The second chapter was about what other people want. Show interest in other people. The 3rd chapter was about getting people to show what they really want.
The author talks about how when he goes fishing he doesn't give the fish food that he likes he gives the fish food that they like. He says we should also do that for people. When talking to people don't think of what you want think of what they want.
The author talks about how salesmen usually make the mistake of seeing things from their angle and not from others. He says the secret of success is seeing things from other peoples point of view.
The author talks about how some parents were trying to get their little girl to eat breakfast. The girl wouldn't eat it. They let her make her own breakfast and she eat it all. The point of letting her make her own breakfast was so she could feel like her mother. So she could feel important.
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"the secret of success is seeing things from other peoples point of view"
→ Suggestion: the secret of success is seeing things from other people's point of view
The possessive form 'people's' is needed here to indicate that the point of view belongs to other people.
"she eat it all"
→ Suggestion: she ate it all
The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past context of the sentence.
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