Teacher's Summary
Your writing presents some interesting ideas about habits and success! With a few corrections in grammar and punctuation, your message will be clearer and more impactful. Keep up the good work and continue refining your writing skills!
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He says that the there are some important things about habits, such as they can always be broken, and they are always built up. You need three things to get a habit knowledge,(why to?),skill,(how to),and desire,(want to).
There are seven habits that almost ensure success. The first one is be proactive. It's described like a tree, the first three are the roots, then 4,5,6 are the branches , and 7 is the sun light.
So to start you need to have a plan and be ready to do whatever is needed. you need to always be moving and thinking ahead this is the first step.
Issues Summary
"the there are"
→ Suggestion: there are
The phrase 'the there are' is incorrect because 'the' is unnecessary. Simply use 'there are' to convey the intended meaning.
"knowledge,(why to?),skill,(how to),and desire,(want to)."
→ Suggestion: knowledge (why to?), skill (how to), and desire (want to).
There should be spaces before the parentheses and commas should be used correctly to separate items in a list.
"is be proactive."
→ Suggestion: is to be proactive.
The phrase should include 'to' to correctly form the infinitive verb phrase 'to be proactive'.
"4,5,6"
→ Suggestion: 4, 5, 6
There should be spaces after the commas for clarity and proper formatting.
"branches , and 7 is the sun light."
→ Suggestion: branches, and 7 is the sunlight.
Remove the space before the comma and correct 'sun light' to 'sunlight' as it is one word.
"you need to always be moving"
→ Suggestion: You need to always be moving
The sentence should start with a capital 'Y' for proper sentence structure.
"thinking ahead this is the first step."
→ Suggestion: thinking ahead. This is the first step.
A period is needed to separate the two independent clauses for clarity.
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