Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents thoughtful ideas about responsibility and proactive behavior. With some attention to grammar and punctuation, your message will be even clearer and more impactful. Keep up the good work!
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The author points out that your response and attitude is more important toward the outcome that directly affects you than what any other person can do. If act like Viktor Frankl in Nazi Germany you can solve any problem and get through any situation.
Responsibility is also response ability. To be irresponsible is the same as ineffective therefore to have total control of your response is of the utmost importance when trying to succeed.
This is directly related to being proactive because it's the opposite of just reacting. But there still needs to be a response. And a well thought out response to something makes up for any time lost trying to come up with the response.
Issues Summary
"your response and attitude is more important"
→ Suggestion: your response and attitude are more important
The subject 'response and attitude' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.
"If act like Viktor Frankl"
→ Suggestion: If you act like Viktor Frankl
The sentence is missing the subject 'you', which is necessary for clarity and grammatical correctness.
"is the same as ineffective therefore"
→ Suggestion: is the same as ineffective; therefore
A semicolon is needed before 'therefore' to properly connect the two independent clauses.
"response is of the utmost importance"
→ Suggestion: response is of utmost importance
The phrase 'the utmost importance' is often simplified to 'utmost importance' for clarity and conciseness.
"a well thought out response"
→ Suggestion: a well-thought-out response
Compound adjectives like 'well-thought-out' should be hyphenated when they precede a noun.
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