Teacher's Summary
You've made some insightful observations about the habits discussed, but there are a few grammatical and punctuation errors that need correction. With careful proofreading, your writing can become even clearer and more impactful!
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The author says that the second habit is begin with the end in mind. So may people just do the next thing without reason. some Examples are getting the next degree or a promotion. But they sacrifice the important things like family and time and money. And they don't have the next end in mind.
If all your projects have value like money, and you get to spend that time with your family then its the right kind of goal. Then you need to apply this to other more important things like work.
These are the first two habits, if these are yours then succeeding becomes habitual as well.
Issues Summary
"begin with the end in mind"
→ Suggestion: begins with the end in mind
The subject 'habit' is singular, so the verb should be in the singular form 'begins' instead of 'begin'.
"So may people just do the next thing without reason."
→ Suggestion: So many people just do the next thing without reason.
The word 'may' is a spelling error; it should be 'many' to correctly convey the intended meaning.
"some Examples are getting the next degree or a promotion."
→ Suggestion: Some examples are getting the next degree or a promotion.
The sentence should start with a capital 'S' in 'Some' to maintain proper sentence structure.
"then its the right kind of goal."
→ Suggestion: then it's the right kind of goal.
'Its' is a possessive form, while 'it's' is the contraction for 'it is', which is the correct usage in this context.
"These are the first two habits, if these are yours then succeeding becomes habitual as well."
→ Suggestion: These are the first two habits; if these are yours, then succeeding becomes habitual as well.
A semicolon should be used instead of a comma to separate the two independent clauses, and a comma is needed after 'yours' for clarity.
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