Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents an interesting narrative with relatable themes. By focusing on grammar and syntax corrections, you can enhance clarity and improve the overall flow of your writing. Keep up the good work and continue refining your skills!
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The author talked about a boss who's workers weren't doing what they were suppose to do. The boss wrote a number on the floor. When the workers saw it someone told them that it was because they didn't do their work. The next day the boss wrote a bigger number and so on. The workers stopped not working.
The author told a story about a boss who saw his workers smoking under a no smoking sign. Instead of saying," can you not read?" He handed them cigars and asked them to smoke them outside.
The author was saying that he hired his niece to work as his secretary and she sometimes messed up at first. He started chewing her out and then realized that when he was her age he messed up even more.
The chapters I read were about making them feel that you think them honest, emphasizing your ideas, and offering someone a challenge and if it looks like there not going to take it throw it down so they do.
Issues Summary
"who's workers"
→ Suggestion: whose workers
The word 'who's' is a contraction for 'who is' or 'who has', while 'whose' is the correct possessive form to indicate that the workers belong to the boss.
"weren't doing what they were suppose to do"
→ Suggestion: supposed to do
The phrase 'suppose to' should be 'supposed to' as it is the correct past participle form used to indicate obligation or expectation.
"stopped not working"
→ Suggestion: stopped working
The phrase 'stopped not working' is confusing; it would be clearer to say 'stopped working' to convey that the workers ceased their lack of productivity.
"Instead of saying," can you not read?""
→ Suggestion: Instead of saying, "can you not read?"
There should be a space after the comma before the quotation mark to properly separate the dialogue from the rest of the sentence.
"there not going to take it"
→ Suggestion: they're not going to take it
'There' refers to a place, while 'they're' is the contraction for 'they are', which is the correct form to indicate that the workers are not going to take the challenge.
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