Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents a clear narrative about encouragement and learning. With a few adjustments to syntax and punctuation, the clarity and professionalism of the piece can be enhanced. Keep up the good work and continue refining your writing skills!
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The author was talking about a boy who got hit in the head when he was younger. The boy was not good at math and his father told him that every night they were going to do math flashcards. The father said that they were going to do it every night until he could do it in eight minutes. The first time did it in 56 minutes. But every time the father told the boy that he was doing great every night. The boy was eventually able to do it in 8 minutes.
This chapter was about using encouragement and making fault seem easy to correct.
Ps. I finished the book and there was less than 30 pages so I wrote one paragraph.
Issues Summary
"The first time did it in 56 minutes."
→ Suggestion: The first time he did it in 56 minutes.
The sentence is missing the subject 'he,' which makes it unclear. Adding 'he' clarifies who is being referred to.
"But every time the father told the boy that he was doing great every night."
→ Suggestion: But every time, the father told the boy that he was doing great.
The phrase 'every time the father told the boy that he was doing great every night' is a fragment and lacks a complete thought. Adjusting the structure makes it a complete sentence.
"Ps."
→ Suggestion: P.S.
The abbreviation for 'postscript' should be formatted as 'P.S.' with periods to indicate it is an abbreviation.
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