Teacher's Summary
This writing sample presents a thoughtful narrative about relationships and personal change. With a few grammatical and spelling corrections, it can become even clearer and more impactful. Keep up the good work!
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A man was complaining to the author about how his wife doesn't seem to love him anymore, and he doesn't seem to love her anymore. The author told him to love her. The man said that the author doesn't understand, and the feeling just isn't there anymore. The author told the man to change himself, to show interest in what she says, and things like that.
The author said that he was doing a speech, and after the speech a woman talked to him. She said that she is a full time nurse for a man who is rude and is never happy with what she does. She always gets grumpy at work and takes it out on her family. But she said that had she listened to the author and changed they way she acted. She changed herself and not the man.
The author said that focusing your efforts on concern wont get you positive change in someone else. Focusing your efforts on influence will. And focusing on your own change will.
Issues Summary
"the feeling just isn't there anymore"
→ Suggestion: the feelings just aren't there anymore
The subject 'the feeling' is singular, but it should be plural to match the context of multiple emotions involved. Changing it to 'the feelings' corrects this.
"had she listened to the author and changed they way she acted"
→ Suggestion: had she listened to the author and changed the way she acted
The word 'they' is incorrect here; it should be 'the' to refer to 'way' in a singular context.
"wont get you positive change"
→ Suggestion: won't get you positive change
The contraction 'wont' is missing an apostrophe. It should be 'won't' to indicate 'will not'.
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